The Heroes of Olympus
The Heroes of Olympus The Lost Crescent
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annabethchase78 posted on Dec 28, 2011 at 08:15PM
opinion:The beginning isn't that good I'm improving NOW
Review: it's like any forum telling a story or fantasy (so you think muahahahahaha) Guide: characters: Luna, Nico, Piper, Jason, Percy, Annabeth, Frank, Hazel, Clarisse, ALL GREEK GODs (including weapons), demigod weapons, Arion, Blackjack, LEO (the awesome), and Thaila ( and the rest of the hunters) Genre- (I thought it was pronounced genray lol FAIL) Fictional Fantasy Rated- teen, for various language and *ahem* romance What you need- a couch a laptop and at least 3 senses Chapter one It started as a dream I think it started as me in a hammock in the summertime by the beach under the stars. Though as it went on it turned into a nightmare I saw a woman with a bow on her back strained in metal bars as a father who must have been extremely Gothic because he was dressed in all black along with a black crown (no sense of style). Was fighting with his wife while his son tried to barge in.... all characters that are Rick Riordian's belong to him except 4 LUNA LUNA IS MINE COMMENT Don't make funof the title do you want to call it the lost crecant the revenge of the pizza bagel !!!!! PROPHECY Daughter of the broken oath travel by sea in the ancient boat one forgives the one who was lost the other finds love at the other’s cost one comes along and joins the quest to find what was missing, in the camp at the west the moon travels tide, and the oath is discovered the daughter of lost ones, her family uncovered Written by: UniversalPowa AKA MY AWESOME SISTER
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I ran up to her “whatsup?” She looked at me for a while grinning then finally said “nothing much I just am happy Sheila isn't here today” I looked at her processing it then said “well if little miss perfect isn’t here then no one will tease you” she just answered with a smile. I felt like I was flown up to my locker I didn’t remember walking up the stairs I shrugged less for me I opened up my locker and sighed 7nth grade 13 years old. I stared into my locker just a few things a mini guitar, a white board also mini, and a class schedule. Everything I need I grabbed my books and headed to homeroom I felt my arms burning at first I thought I was carrying too much which was odd because I was only carrying one book. I sat down for first period social studies I looked out the window at the rain now pouring down when I saw a figure in black thrown onto the grass. He dusted himself off and started yelling at the ground words he shouldn't use around a school which wasn’t the first question I really asked if he was Gothic and then why he was thrown out of mid-air. Like I said I’m doing well for an ADHD kid, I quickly snapped into attention and worked for a few seconds and then looked back again no one was there. After ist period my arms were screaming in pain finally I pulled up my sleeve and saw red words forming saying “THE DEAD WILL COME FOR PREY IF YOU READ THIS YOU HAVE THE CRESCENT”. Then it formed in many other languages I pulled down my sleeve quickly “what’s happening to me” I whispered under my breath. By the end of the period my whole body was covered in the same words scratched into my skin. I kept hiding my face, my teeth clenched in pain I ran after the bell rang to find Natalie. I showed her the markings and her face paled and she grabbed my arm (which really hurt) and said “follow me”............
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Chapter one
Luna’s PoV
Scratches of words
It started as a dream I think it started as me in a hammock in the summertime by the beach under the stars. Though as it went on it turned into a nightmare I saw a woman with a bow on her back strained in metal bars as a father who must have been extremely Gothic because he was dressed in all black along with a black crown (no sense of style). Was fighting with his wife while his son tried to barge in. The son much like his father looked stressed and looked emo while the wife was dressed in white. The wife and son seemed to be rooting for the same thing they were yelling about some helmet and stealing while all I was worried about was the women chained up she seemed to have some importance when suddenly with a flashing light the women screamed. Though it didn’t sound like a scream it sounded like........an alarm clock? My eyes suddenly fluttered open and instinctively banged it not realizing I still had a “Harry Potter” book in my hand crushing my alarm clock. “ingenious” I muttered staring at the broken pieces. I got out of bed quickly got dressed for school and walked downstairs slowly listening for the events going on. It was silent which meant my mom had left for work my mom was neither good nor bad she’s indifferent let’s say she’s fun and mean she’s............fean. My dad was laying on the couch whip-cream spread along his mouth. I got some “nutella” from the shelf and had “nutella” on bread. I looked at the label “natural and organic” I muttered “ya,right and I’m a unicorn”. I slipped on my jacked and back pack and rode my bike to school. I live close to the school,I have ADHD, I only have one friend, I experience weird things I am Luna Striker I have blonde hair and dark-blue eyes. I am doing well in school for an ADHD kid. I shuffle around alot and it’s hard to concentrate,but everything fits together well. As I rode in and parked my bike I met up with my best friend Natalie. She wasn’t what you call normal she walked funny and never wore shorts, she ate inhuman things I never pointed this out because everyone else did. I ran up to her “whatsup?” She looked at me for a while grinning then finally said “nothing much I just am happy Sheila isn't here today” I looked at her processing it then said “well if little miss perfect isn’t here then no one will tease you” she just answered with a smile. I felt like I was flown up to my locker I didn’t remember walking up the stairs I shrugged less for me I opened up my locker and sighed 7nth grade 13 years old. I stared into my locker just a few things a mini guitar, a white board also mini, and a class schedule. Everything I need I grabbed my books and headed to homeroom I felt my arms burning at first I thought I was carrying too much which was odd because I was only carrying one book. I sat down for first period social studies I looked out the window at the rain now pouring down when I saw a figure in black thrown onto the grass. He dusted himself off and started yelling at the ground words he shouldn't use around a school which wasn’t the first question I really asked if he was Gothic and then why he was thrown out of mid-air. Like I said I’m doing well for an ADHD kid, I quickly snapped into attention and worked for a few seconds and then looked back again no one was there. After ist period my arms were screaming in pain finally I pulled up my sleeve and saw red words forming saying “THE DEAD WILL COME FOR PREY IF YOU READ THIS YOU HAVE THE CRESCENT”. Then it formed in many other languages I pulled down my sleeve quickly “What’s happening to me” I whispered under my breath. By the end of the period my whole body was covered in the same words scratched into my skin. I kept hiding my face, my teeth clenched in pain I ran after the bell rang to find Natalie. I showed her the markings and her face paled and she grabbed my arm (which really hurt) and said “follow me”
we ran out into the rain I quickly put on my hood and we ran into the street where I keep my bike as we were about to reach the point we looked at each other and suddenly we bumped into each other which was for some reason it was harder then it should have been. I looked up to see who it was and it was the same Gothic boy from my dream I stared at him and then someone pulled me up and put me on my bike I quickly realized it was Natalie she told me “go” and I did to my house not much better yet I had to get away from school. It only took a few minutes to reach my house and I got off my bike put it in the garage and ran into the woods did I forget to mention that part,probably I have had a huge acre of woods in my backyard so when I’m upset I go into the woods climb the highest tree and soon someone comes I don’t know the persons name she looks like a spirit she comes out of the small pond by the tree and floats up to me we talk and I tell her my problems she listens and gives me advice yet this time was different. I looked up at the high tree and started climbing it took me longer then usual but soon I was near the top I sat down on one of the branches and waited....I waited.,........and waited she would’ve come by now it was too late yet as I was coming down I noticed someone walking toward me a Gothic boy with dark hair and pale skin the boy in my dream the same boy I bumped into so the first thing I yelled was “WHAT DID YOU DO TO NICOLE”. I guess this cued a face palm, he looked up at me his hair mostly covering up his face he just said with a dull voice “she’s fine she went back to school don’t worry she trusts me why don’t you”. I looked at him and said”because your emo” he gave himself another face-palm and said “why does everyone always think that”. “Well” I answered “your dressed in black and keep giving yourself face-palms”. He growled at me (if it’s possible) and motioned me to follow now if I did well in school I wouldn’t follow so I followed. “Where are we going” I asked “to camp” he replied “does this cost money because my parents won’t allow this if it does” I said he was about to give himself another face-palm when he stopped probably realizing that's the reason people think he’s emo(we didn’t get a real answer on that so he is).............
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Luna’s PoV
Scratches of words
It started as a dream I think it started as me in a hammock in the summertime by the beach under the stars. Though as it went on it turned into a nightmare I saw a woman with a bow on her back strained in metal bars as a father who must have been extremely Gothic because he was dressed in all black along with a black crown (no sense of style). Was fighting with his wife while his son tried to barge in. The son much like his father looked stressed and looked emo while the wife was dressed in white. The wife and son seemed to be rooting for the same thing they were yelling about some helmet and stealing while all I was worried about was the women chained up she seemed to have some importance when suddenly with a flashing light the women screamed. Though it didn’t sound like a scream it sounded like........an alarm clock? My eyes suddenly fluttered open and instinctively banged it not realizing I still had a “Harry Potter” book in my hand crushing my alarm clock. “ingenious” I muttered staring at the broken pieces. I got out of bed quickly got dressed for school and walked downstairs slowly listening for the events going on. It was silent which meant my mom had left for work my mom was neither good nor bad she’s indifferent let’s say she’s fun and mean she’s............fean. My dad was laying on the couch whip-cream spread along his mouth. I got some “nutella” from the shelf and had “nutella” on bread. I looked at the label “natural and organic” I muttered “ya,right and I’m a unicorn”. I slipped on my jacked and back pack and rode my bike to school. I live close to the school,I have ADHD, I only have one friend, I experience weird things I am Luna Striker I have blonde hair and dark-blue eyes. I am doing well in school for an ADHD kid. I shuffle around alot and it’s hard to concentrate,but everything fits together well. As I rode in and parked my bike I met up with my best friend Natalie. She wasn’t what you call normal she walked funny and never wore shorts, she ate inhuman things I never pointed this out because everyone else did. I ran up to her “whatsup?” She looked at me for a while grinning then finally said “nothing much I just am happy Sheila isn't here today” I looked at her processing it then said “well if little miss perfect isn’t here then no one will tease you” she just answered with a smile. I felt like I was flown up to my locker I didn’t remember walking up the stairs I shrugged less for me I opened up my locker and sighed 7nth grade 13 years old. I stared into my locker just a few things a mini guitar, a white board also mini, and a class schedule. Everything I need I grabbed my books and headed to homeroom I felt my arms burning at first I thought I was carrying too much which was odd because I was only carrying one book. I sat down for first period social studies I looked out the window at the rain now pouring down when I saw a figure in black thrown onto the grass. He dusted himself off and started yelling at the ground words he shouldn't use around a school which wasn’t the first question I really asked if he was Gothic and then why he was thrown out of mid-air. Like I said I’m doing well for an ADHD kid, I quickly snapped into attention and worked for a few seconds and then looked back again no one was there. After ist period my arms were screaming in pain finally I pulled up my sleeve and saw red words forming saying “THE DEAD WILL COME FOR PREY IF YOU READ THIS YOU HAVE THE CRESCENT”. Then it formed in many other languages I pulled down my sleeve quickly “What’s happening to me” I whispered under my breath. By the end of the period my whole body was covered in the same words scratched into my skin. I kept hiding my face, my teeth clenched in pain I ran after the bell rang to find Natalie. I showed her the markings and her face paled and she grabbed my arm (which really hurt) and said “follow me”
we ran out into the rain I quickly put on my hood and we ran into the street where I keep my bike as we were about to reach the point we looked at each other and suddenly we bumped into each other which was for some reason it was harder then it should have been. I looked up to see who it was and it was the same Gothic boy from my dream I stared at him and then someone pulled me up and put me on my bike I quickly realized it was Natalie she told me “go” and I did to my house not much better yet I had to get away from school. It only took a few minutes to reach my house and I got off my bike put it in the garage and ran into the woods did I forget to mention that part,probably I have had a huge acre of woods in my backyard so when I’m upset I go into the woods climb the highest tree and soon someone comes I don’t know the persons name she looks like a spirit she comes out of the small pond by the tree and floats up to me we talk and I tell her my problems she listens and gives me advice yet this time was different. I looked up at the high tree and started climbing it took me longer then usual but soon I was near the top I sat down on one of the branches and waited....I waited.,........and waited she would’ve come by now it was too late yet as I was coming down I noticed someone walking toward me a Gothic boy with dark hair and pale skin the boy in my dream the same boy I bumped into so the first thing I yelled was “WHAT DID YOU DO TO NICOLE”. I guess this cued a face palm, he looked up at me his hair mostly covering up his face he just said with a dull voice “she’s fine she went back to school don’t worry she trusts me why don’t you”. I looked at him and said”because your emo” he gave himself another face-palm and said “why does everyone always think that”. “Well” I answered “your dressed in black and keep giving yourself face-palms”. He growled at me (if it’s possible) and motioned me to follow now if I did well in school I wouldn’t follow so I followed. “Where are we going” I asked “to camp” he replied “does this cost money because my parents won’t allow this if it does” I said he was about to give himself another face-palm when he stopped probably realizing that's the reason people think he’s emo(we didn’t get a real answer on that so he is).............
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