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Davis: What do u think of my story?

Name: Davis the Dog
Age: 11
DOB: 9/10/2030
Powers: Ghost
Wears: Purple bandana with a "D" on it like Shock
Abilities: Flying, phasing through solid things, making ghostly copies of himself, and blasts ghost energy, possess people's bodies and "read" people's souls

Davis is the future-son of Shock and Aqua. He was born with ghost powers--which came from the Underworld. He's a lot like his dad: kind, happy and brave. But he gets scared a lot, but tries his best to be like his father. Shock told Davis all about his life as a hero, and about the legendary Jiyu--but Davis has no idea that they are the same person.

For about a year, he's been hated, mocked and even beaten just because of his powers. Even some of his own family have abused him. His life was great until people discovered his ghost powers. Now people are after him--not to take his powers, but to banish him to the Underworld.
 ShadowFan100 posted over a year ago
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Shadowsister said:
Red: nice i like it ^_^ you should write the rest
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posted over a year ago 
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U really like it? Thanks.....what do u like about it?
ShadowFan100 posted over a year ago
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Red: yes i really like it and i like how you wrote his past and the rest ^ ^
Shadowsister posted over a year ago
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Red: ^_^
Shadowsister posted over a year ago
PhoenixRoyale said:
That's more than two or three abilities. ;P If he's supposed to be a ghost, he doesn't need the flying powers. Reading people's souls doesn't fit him, either. Oh, and it's kind of contradicting that he can touch people since he's a ghost, cause you can't feel ghosts. :/

He's an overall okay character. You need to get into depth with all your characters and make them three dimensional. Make them a character that people would appreciate--But most importantly;
Change the way people think about you. You have been known for making Shock and Malice Gary-Stus, also turning Shock into semi-Marty-Sam, A.K.A a more angsty and oversensitive version of a Gary-Stu. :L You should modify your characters a little more.

Oh, and the whole 'Bandana' wear on your characters, you might want to stop adding so much bandanas on your characters. Be original with your character's designs.
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Dude...he's not a ghost....he was born on Mobius with ghost POWERS.
ShadowFan100 posted over a year ago
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So...what do u think of it? Sad huh?
ShadowFan100 posted over a year ago
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Quite sad.
PhoenixRoyale posted over a year ago
MephilesTheDark said:
It had potential. Use it and don't waste it like you did with Shock.
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Um, I didn't waste anything with Shock. Anyway, back to Davis....thanks, I appriciate it.. Do u like the story? And whay do u like about it?
ShadowFan100 posted over a year ago
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I like the... dark-ness of it. As corny as that sounds, I do just really like intricate, detailed, and dark storylines. The concept here is fantastic, don't get me wrong- But you really do need to work on giving your characters more dimension. This is irrelevant, but I did rather enjoy that roleplay with Seth, Davis, and JayCee. :)
MephilesTheDark posted over a year ago
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Yeah, sure.
MephilesTheDark posted over a year ago
Yosuki-Hiroshi said:
Boreas:I'll spar with him,i'm immortal and my face never looks old
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Davis: OK I'll fight ya. Are u ready?
ShadowFan100 posted over a year ago
Manhunter108 said:
its good i lovedit
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Davis: Thanks!
ShadowFan100 posted over a year ago
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